Sentence Work Using Angela Carter

“Milord has his eyrie high above the house, a small, stifling, darkened room; he keeps the shutters locked at noon.”

What I like about this sentence:

  • The differences between house and eyrie, height and remove, accentuates milord versus those beneath him in rank.
  • The differences between dark and light, the closed in room and the view it is necessarily cut off from.
  • The assonance rhyme of the two main clauses.

My sentence:
My brother parks his van out by the soybean fields, a windowless relic of one night stands and rust; he keeps the stereo up full blast.

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